Thursday, December 9, 2010

While I'm thinking about it...

...I should post some fiction. If I don't do it now I'll probably forget it for tomorrow. I took some time today during my break to write this. With that being said, it is just a rough draft beginning. So, there are a few things that need to be changed or added.


It was August, the leaves were just starting to turn and the nights were getting shorter. Soon, Ryan would be headed to (college) and Renee would be headed to (college). They’d spent the better part of two years together every day. Soon they’d be hours apart and only together every few weekends.
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“Let’s go for a drive.” Renee was sitting on the couch watching some reality television show and working on her latest knitting project.
“Where to?” Ryan was in the kitchen, hurriedly trying to finish washing the dishes from dinner.
“Anywhere.”
“Anywhere?” He looked over to the bird clock on the wall to see the time. 10:23, he thought, not too late.
“Yea, I’m bored.”
Ryan pulled the stopper out of the drain and watched the soapy water vacate the sink. He walked past the living room and down the hall to his room. He put a sweatshirt on and grabbed his keys. He walked back to the living room and stood, watching Renee as she finished knitting a row on her project. He liked the way she would bite her lip when she was focusing intently on something.  “What are you waiting for?” he asked.
Renee looked up from the project and smiled, her cheeks were a little red. She knew he was just watching her. “Give me a minute.”
“Okay,” he said, ‘I’m going to go start the car.”
Renee put her project in her knitting bag, she hadn’t decided if they were going to be socks or mittens yet. She stuffed her knitting bag between the couch and the end table. Then put her shoes on and grabbed her purse on her way out the door.
Ryan was standing in the middle of the driveway, hands stuck in his pocket and looking up at the stars. He liked living in the country so that the light from town wouldn’t pollute the view of the stars. He liked gazing at the stars. Some nights he would lay in the driveway for hours just looking at the stars.
“What are you doing?” Renee set her purse on the roof of the car and walked to where Ryan was standing in the middle of the driveway.
“Thinking.” He took his left hand out of the pocket and put it around Renee. He pulled her closer to him, squeezing her just a little.
“About what?” She leaned her head back on his shoulder and looked up at the stars. The Big Dipper was just overhead.
“Just stuff.” He leaned his head on hers, but just for a moment. Then he let go of Renee and started towards the car.
“Stuff?” She looked at the stars for a few seconds longer and let out long sigh. She turned and started towards the car.

3 comments:

  1. I like this a lot. The relationship feels real.

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  2. "I like this a lot. The relationship feels real." I kinda wish there was a like button on comments in here.

    This is what real writing is!

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